tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post938029212733529396..comments2023-06-09T04:25:11.266-07:00Comments on Going for coffee...: Once Upon a Time Flash Fiction Contest : Maddie WhiteJo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)http://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comBlogger51125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-723851046041145782012-05-05T18:19:22.184-07:002012-05-05T18:19:22.184-07:00Well hey there Erin :)) Thank you for checking out...Well hey there Erin :)) Thank you for checking out my story. There is an urban equivalent to the seven dwarfs but I didn't include it because it most involved riding public transit to work. #notenoughactionJo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-61439872995580282412012-05-05T12:03:04.556-07:002012-05-05T12:03:04.556-07:00Hey! Melancholy and beautiful story. I'd lov...Hey! Melancholy and beautiful story. I'd love to see the gritty urban equivalent of the seven dwarves. :-DAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13396795515314570563noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-21916783756868483512012-04-29T22:53:49.777-07:002012-04-29T22:53:49.777-07:00Thanks Kelley! You are such a sweetie! Loved your...Thanks Kelley! You are such a sweetie! Loved your story - way to get in just under the deadline! Thank you for your kind comments and for popping by to read my story. :))))Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-37774586888085618432012-04-29T22:01:34.829-07:002012-04-29T22:01:34.829-07:00Wow. Just, wow. Snow White no longer bores me (com...Wow. Just, wow. Snow White no longer bores me (come on, you have to admit that her character was a snooze-fest)! I'd rather read your version any day.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-52846035006235106662012-04-29T20:06:38.008-07:002012-04-29T20:06:38.008-07:00Unexpectedly urban and cool remake of a fairytale....Unexpectedly urban and cool remake of a fairytale. Thanks for entering! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09004546178112127604noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-1913563977536199622012-04-29T14:50:45.712-07:002012-04-29T14:50:45.712-07:00thanks so much for taking the time to read and com...thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment :)) I liked that you brought humour into your story - enjoyed it!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-76996471843436015932012-04-29T10:21:41.272-07:002012-04-29T10:21:41.272-07:00Heart-wrenching take on a great classic tale. Grea...Heart-wrenching take on a great classic tale. Great little hints throughout. Very nicely done Jo-Anne!J. Whitworth Hazzardhttp://zombiemechanics.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-10551964742269403372012-04-28T15:59:19.713-07:002012-04-28T15:59:19.713-07:00Tracy - what kind comments - thank you! Really wan...Tracy - what kind comments - thank you! Really wanted to put a modern 'edge' on the story. Once I got the idea, I just couldn't change it. Funny how we get focused in on these things eh? As you know, I also really enjoyed your story. Thanks so much for popping over and reading mine. Appreciated!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-77271204493967902602012-04-28T09:39:25.938-07:002012-04-28T09:39:25.938-07:00Truly an Unexpected Fairy Tale! A modern twist to...Truly an Unexpected Fairy Tale! A modern twist to the traditional, and probably once a very dark story, Snow White. Very clever and well written. Good luck :)TracyFellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224475173136774530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-36325075200658812462012-04-24T16:47:14.420-07:002012-04-24T16:47:14.420-07:00Cameron, thank you so much for taking the time to ...Cameron, thank you so much for taking the time to comment. I appreciate your enthusiastic response! It was a bit of a challenge trying to get my idea to fit into the 350 words or less but challenging ourselves is what we writers are all about, isn't it? Thanks again!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-52719445781195057542012-04-24T09:56:07.468-07:002012-04-24T09:56:07.468-07:00Knock out - wasn't expecting that! Good word ...Knock out - wasn't expecting that! Good word play too - congrats.Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745199648604340657noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-80545197433209337982012-04-23T17:46:35.669-07:002012-04-23T17:46:35.669-07:00Thank you Angela for your kind comments. We'v...Thank you Angela for your kind comments. We've now connected on twitter so you know I also really enjoyed your story!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-19848110272198869452012-04-23T13:26:49.677-07:002012-04-23T13:26:49.677-07:00How inventive! It's both heart-breaking and ho...How inventive! It's both heart-breaking and hopeful. Very beautiful story. Great work!Angela Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08405824955821316661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-18955710650066507892012-04-21T18:52:36.345-07:002012-04-21T18:52:36.345-07:00Thanks Heather! Appreciate you taking the time to ...Thanks Heather! Appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I enjoyed your entry too and have left a comment. :))Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-64672424041578624872012-04-21T17:49:01.789-07:002012-04-21T17:49:01.789-07:00Nicely done! Thanks for the good read.Nicely done! Thanks for the good read.Heather Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12296786621907813568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-34422283270734935062012-04-21T13:33:04.399-07:002012-04-21T13:33:04.399-07:00Thank you Chris for your kind and generous comment...Thank you Chris for your kind and generous comment. Means a great deal to me. I am trying to work on a couple of longer pieces - so soon!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-73685035846796277042012-04-21T13:31:30.711-07:002012-04-21T13:31:30.711-07:00Wow, great flash writing there, Jo. Would echo KD ...Wow, great flash writing there, Jo. Would echo KD on the tightness of structure, not a word wasted. I also really enjoyed that it was more than 5 sentences. You can obviously do it, so please continue!Chris Jameshttp://www.chrisjames.eunoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-82430043690874471522012-04-21T06:33:55.340-07:002012-04-21T06:33:55.340-07:00Thanks very much Rebecca - Very kind of you to tak...Thanks very much Rebecca - Very kind of you to take the time to read my entry and to leave such a nice comment!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-12889166607992666372012-04-21T03:32:54.983-07:002012-04-21T03:32:54.983-07:00Great story! Such a different take on the Snow Whi...Great story! Such a different take on the Snow White story. Very well done!Becky Fyfehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01595020500346331076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-69595779947253746472012-04-19T20:44:47.048-07:002012-04-19T20:44:47.048-07:00Laura, thanks so much for reading my story and com...Laura, thanks so much for reading my story and commenting. As you know, I thought YOUR #ouat story was brilliant. I think we have similar sensibilities and I'm looking forward to reading more of your blog on the weekend. :))Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-39661303269378287532012-04-19T10:20:54.611-07:002012-04-19T10:20:54.611-07:00Absolutely brilliant story, I enjoyed reading it. ...Absolutely brilliant story, I enjoyed reading it. I especially loved: It was the only present he ever bought her and Maddie figures he shot himself to get out of buying her another on her 18th.Laura Huntleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17950471747894297215noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-38362765717762172502012-04-18T15:50:05.255-07:002012-04-18T15:50:05.255-07:00Meg, thank you so much for taking the time to read...Meg, thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. My writing style doesn't always lend itself to this kind of challenge so I appreciate your comment even more. By the way, your story in this contest is a stunner! Really really enjoyed it!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-33223266280905144962012-04-18T12:54:31.875-07:002012-04-18T12:54:31.875-07:00Great contemporary twist on a classic - I love the...Great contemporary twist on a classic - I love the immediacy of the present tense and the language you use to tell it. It all hangs together so well.Meg McNultyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04985840066083718618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-9579207935284519542012-04-17T20:47:02.795-07:002012-04-17T20:47:02.795-07:00Kern your comments and generous words mean so much...Kern your comments and generous words mean so much. I really enjoyed the challenge on this one but wanted to ensure it respected the difficult story as well as the homage to Snow White. Thank you for always knowing what to say!Jo-Anne Teal (jtvancouver)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10560042112608893203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4192092613796233894.post-22267505955845036242012-04-17T20:36:55.125-07:002012-04-17T20:36:55.125-07:00Beautifully done, Jo. What a fabulous take on the ...Beautifully done, Jo. What a fabulous take on the classic Snow White: you've taken it, shaken it, thrown in a dose of grit and grim, and what a marvel of a story has emerged! I love how you've given just enough of a hint of backstory to make us really see Maddie, enough to make us care what happens to her. It's vivid and real, and a very unexpected fairytale indeed.<br /><br />(Dr. Reg Alprince? Love it!!!)Kern Windwraithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16771591425163484238noreply@blogger.com